[ { "id": "sniper.the-long-way-in", "weapon": "sniper", "title": "THE LONG WAY IN", "tier": "MYTHIC", "kind": "film", "status": "built", "brut": 5, "cine": 7, "script": 7, "anim": 5, "brut_why": "The XT ends on a mid-distance lump: the back exit reads as a red starburst, the face a small skull mask; the inside ride is abstract pink bands.", "cine_why": "The bullet-cam (receiver, rifling, map flight, the weave) is real cinema, but 18.1 s is over the 15 s cap and the payoff frame is a flat lump under the trail.", "script_why": "A round that crosses the map in 0.04 s given nine seconds to ride through him: memorable and pure sniper.", "anim_why": "Receiver cutaway and rifling are detailed; the anatomy macro is flat stripes; the final body is flat with a sticker crater.", "fix": "Cut to 15 s; a readable organ ride (rib snapping, lung, the heart wall tearing); end on a low close of the fist-sized back exit with scapula shards and the dead face turned to camera under the trail.", "scorer": "NEW-4", "sheet": "/Volumes/Workspace/Scratch/n4/sheets/sniper_audit/sniper.the-long-way-in.jpg", "len": 18.1 }, { "id": "sniper.the-bait", "weapon": "sniper", "title": "THE BAIT", "tier": "LEGENDARY", "kind": "film", "status": "built", "brut": 6, "cine": 6, "script": 7, "anim": 4, "brut_why": "The knee blast and the jaw shot read mid-film, but the XT final is a lone yellow shin tube with one pink strand: reads as a sausage, no face (brutCheck NOFACE).", "cine_why": "Rain and the scope wait build; side wides; the final frames a prop, and the VH..VL finals are near-empty floor (ladder fails).", "script_why": "Wound one man to draw out his friend: the oldest sniper cruelty, a real story.", "anim_why": "Rain and bubbles; flat bodies; the severed leg is a plain tube with a flat strand.", "fix": "End on Mikku's dead face at the grate with his own torn-off shin beside it and Fayiz's jawless face beyond; real stump anatomy (bone, muscle, tendons); six different finals.", "scorer": "NEW-4", "sheet": "/Volumes/Workspace/Scratch/n4/sheets/sniper_audit/sniper.the-bait.jpg", "len": 12.38 }, { "id": "sniper.mascot", "weapon": "sniper", "title": "MASCOT", "tier": "EPIC", "kind": "film", "status": "built", "brut": 5, "cine": 5, "script": 6, "anim": 5, "brut_why": "The burst seam is a red disc on a cartoon foam head; the googly mascot face carries the final and the man's own face never reads (headgear on at XT).", "cine_why": "A cheerful medium, a scope crash, a handheld stagger: plain coverage; the final is a lying side view.", "script_why": "The sewn-on grin keeps smiling: ironic, but a gag core unless the man inside is shown.", "anim_why": "The costume is painted with care (fur, emblem, cape); the wound is a flat disc and the body flat.", "fix": "Tear the foam head half off at the burst seam so his real dead face shows inside the mascot mouth, bone and brain spilling with the foam.", "scorer": "NEW-4", "sheet": "/Volumes/Workspace/Scratch/n4/sheets/sniper_audit/sniper.mascot.jpg", "len": 8.86 }, { "id": "sniper.playing-statue", "weapon": "sniper", "title": "PLAYING STATUE", "tier": "LEGENDARY", "kind": "film", "status": "built", "brut": 6, "cine": 6, "script": 7, "anim": 6, "brut_why": "The crater in the stone face with a living bloodshot eye inside is the page's best image, but little meat or depth reads at phone size.", "cine_why": "Five near-identical scope frames, no build of dread; the final is a static close; XT..M finals are the same pose and framing.", "script_why": "Playing statue so well that he stays: a good hook; the eye moving in the stone is horrific.", "anim_why": "Stone texture, lichen, ants, a bone rim on the crater; the body is flat grey.", "fix": "Crack the stone head open with wet flesh behind the stone skin and the eye on its nerve; six different finals (topple at VH, the finger at M).", "scorer": "NEW-4", "sheet": "/Volumes/Workspace/Scratch/n4/sheets/sniper_audit/sniper.playing-statue.jpg", "len": 11.23 }, { "id": "sniper.the-guide-line", "weapon": "sniper", "title": "THE GUIDE LINE", "tier": "LEGENDARY", "kind": "film", "status": "built", "brut": 4, "cine": 5, "script": 6, "anim": 4, "brut_why": "The grave-wax body is flat pale olive with tiny slits; no blood weight; brutCheck LIVEFACE (a pain face on the corpse).", "cine_why": "The silt-out murk and the red line read; most frames are murky mids; the final is a profile.", "script_why": "Following the laser like a diver's line down to his grave: haunting.", "anim_why": "Flat wax body with mottling blobs; a murk overlay; nothing wet.", "fix": "Burst thigh with bone in the red cloud, a real drowned dead face, wax splitting over red meat; frame the hand on the line with the face.", "scorer": "NEW-4", "sheet": "/Volumes/Workspace/Scratch/n4/sheets/sniper_audit/sniper.the-guide-line.jpg", "len": 11.63 }, { "id": "sniper.the-gutter", "weapon": "sniper", "title": "THE GUTTER", "tier": "LEGENDARY", "kind": "film", "status": "built", "brut": 5, "cine": 7, "script": 8, "anim": 5, "brut_why": "In the round paper hole the drilled forearm and cheek read as red cogs with white spikes; the yellow visor stays across his eyes at XT.", "cine_why": "The cage folding into a six-panel comic page and the round tearing it in reading order is real cinema; the final is a centred vignette.", "script_why": "The round crossing comic-page gutters in reading order: clever and unique.", "anim_why": "Paper, panels and bystander art are detailed; the wounds read as cogs; the body is flat.", "fix": "Real torn cheek and skull exit instead of the cog wounds, visor knocked off, a dead face; frame the drilled forearm with both bone ends.", "scorer": "NEW-4", "sheet": "/Volumes/Workspace/Scratch/n4/sheets/sniper_audit/sniper.the-gutter.jpg", "len": 9.43 }, { "id": "sniper.bone-flowers", "weapon": "sniper", "title": "BONE FLOWERS", "tier": "EPIC", "kind": "film", "status": "built", "brut": 4, "cine": 4, "script": 6, "anim": 5, "brut_why": "Ends on a clean white skeleton under bright pink coral plumes: pretty, reads as flowers, not as a man eaten.", "cine_why": "A locked-off wide time-lapse with a tiny body for most of the film.", "script_why": "The deep eats what falls, in order: grim, but the man is gone too early.", "anim_why": "Wreck ribs, hagfish and the carpet are painted; the final skeleton is plain.", "fix": "Hold on the half-eaten stage: the face half stripped (one eye left), hagfish knotted into the wound, close.", "scorer": "NEW-4", "sheet": "/Volumes/Workspace/Scratch/n4/sheets/sniper_audit/sniper.bone-flowers.jpg", "len": 9.43 }, { "id": "sniper.the-last-look", "weapon": "sniper", "title": "THE LAST LOOK", "tier": "EPIC", "kind": "film", "status": "built", "brut": 6, "cine": 6, "script": 6, "anim": 5, "brut_why": "The XT skull lid hinged open with pink brain over bloodshot eyes reads, on a man draped over a beam with flat arms.", "cine_why": "The body-check and fall are staged in small wides; the final is static; XT, VH and H share one framing.", "script_why": "Shot while leaning over the rail to watch Faris fall: a neat reversal, simple.", "anim_why": "Brain folds in the open crown; the body is flat cyan tubes with no light.", "fix": "Frame the open crown from above, brain spilling, the cap on the rail beyond; light and soak the body.", "scorer": "NEW-4", "sheet": "/Volumes/Workspace/Scratch/n4/sheets/sniper_audit/sniper.the-last-look.jpg", "len": 7.08 }, { "id": "sniper.eight-bells", "weapon": "sniper", "title": "EIGHT BELLS", "tier": "EPIC", "kind": "film", "status": "built", "brut": 3, "cine": 4, "script": 6, "anim": 3, "brut_why": "The XT final is unreadable: a coat, motion lines and a red smear over the sea.", "cine_why": "The case-build intercuts are four near-identical frames; the shot and the fall don't read.", "script_why": "The assassin's ritual against the captain's ritual on the eighth bell: classy.", "anim_why": "The case and the captain's costume are fine; the final is smeared.", "fix": "Rebuild the payoff: the captain floating face up, the notch wound pulsing in the lantern light, his watch still ticking.", "scorer": "NEW-4", "sheet": "/Volumes/Workspace/Scratch/n4/sheets/sniper_audit/sniper.eight-bells.jpg", "len": 11.63 }, { "id": "sniper.the-long-shadow", "weapon": "sniper", "title": "THE LONG SHADOW", "tier": "EPIC", "kind": "film", "status": "built", "brut": 5, "cine": 6, "script": 6, "anim": 4, "brut_why": "The exit on his back reads as a POW starburst with a tooth ring; the beanie stays on at XT.", "cine_why": "The shadow-rifle laid over him is a strong image; tracking wides; the final is a side view.", "script_why": "The shadow arrives before the round: poetic.", "anim_why": "The shadow silhouette carries the rifle; the body is flat, the crater a sticker.", "fix": "Headgear off, a real crater with rib and liver, the face turned to the last light.", "scorer": "NEW-4", "sheet": "/Volumes/Workspace/Scratch/n4/sheets/sniper_audit/sniper.the-long-shadow.jpg", "len": 7.83 }, { "id": "sniper.hold-your-breath", "weapon": "sniper", "title": "HOLD YOUR BREATH", "tier": "EPIC", "kind": "film", "status": "built", "brut": 6, "cine": 5, "script": 6, "anim": 5, "brut_why": "The sucking chest wound reads as a mouth with teeth (white rib bars round pink lung); the petechiae and blue lips are good.", "cine_why": "Rooftops in rain and the scope: plain coverage, no device; a side-lying final.", "script_why": "The world holds its breath with the sniper: a lovely conceit.", "anim_why": "Laundry, rain and smoke are detailed; the wound shape is wrong; flat body.", "fix": "Redraw the sucking wound as a ragged hole on curved broken ribs with froth bubbles; frame the face and the wound together.", "scorer": "NEW-4", "sheet": "/Volumes/Workspace/Scratch/n4/sheets/sniper_audit/sniper.hold-your-breath.jpg", "len": 8.63 }, { "id": "sniper.between-beats", "weapon": "sniper", "title": "BETWEEN BEATS", "tier": "EPIC", "kind": "film", "status": "built", "brut": 6, "cine": 7, "script": 7, "anim": 5, "brut_why": "The spray painted up the step is strong; the neck wound reads as a sausage cross-section; the face is small.", "cine_why": "Cuts on the heartbeats, the scope pulse and the freeze: good; the payoff close is decent.", "script_why": "Fired between two heartbeats, the next beat pumps the exit: tight and weapon-true.", "anim_why": "The spray is detailed; the neck wound is flat tubes; the body flat.", "fix": "A real torn throat (tracheal rings, the carotid flared) with his hand on it; light the body.", "scorer": "NEW-4", "sheet": "/Volumes/Workspace/Scratch/n4/sheets/sniper_audit/sniper.between-beats.jpg", "len": 8.93 }, { "id": "sniper.the-cloud", "weapon": "sniper", "title": "THE CLOUD", "tier": "RARE", "kind": "film", "status": "built", "brut": 4, "cine": 6, "script": 6, "anim": 4, "brut_why": "Two round wounds read as red targets; the arm fold is mild; the headband lies across the eye.", "cine_why": "The cloud edge sweeping toward the far perch and the glint is good staging.", "script_why": "A cloud decides a sniper duel: tidy.", "anim_why": "The cloud shadow layer is nice; the body flat, the wounds plain discs.", "fix": "Elbow blown apart with bone, the armpit jet, the headband off, a real dead face.", "scorer": "NEW-4", "sheet": "/Volumes/Workspace/Scratch/n4/sheets/sniper_audit/sniper.the-cloud.jpg", "len": 7.51 }, { "id": "sniper.soap-bubble", "weapon": "sniper", "title": "SOAP BUBBLE", "tier": "RARE", "kind": "film", "status": "built", "brut": 4, "cine": 5, "script": 6, "anim": 4, "brut_why": "The far-side skull wound reads as a mouth with spikes; the red bubble is nice; the party hat stays on at XT.", "cine_why": "Plain mediums and one crash.", "script_why": "A sniper round passes through a soap bubble without popping it: a whimsical gag core.", "anim_why": "The bubble's thin film is nice; the body is flat.", "fix": "Headgear off; a real skull blow-out with the spray painting the inside of the bubble, framed with his face.", "scorer": "NEW-4", "sheet": "/Volumes/Workspace/Scratch/n4/sheets/sniper_audit/sniper.soap-bubble.jpg", "len": 8.64 }, { "id": "sniper.sling", "weapon": "sniper", "title": "SLING", "tier": "RARE", "kind": "film", "status": "built", "brut": 5, "cine": 6, "script": 6, "anim": 4, "brut_why": "Three spikes through him with flat barcode blood bars; the cap stays on; the face is small at the top edge.", "cine_why": "The scope riding the swing, the KLINK and the flight: good.", "script_why": "Cut the chain at the bottom of the swing: clever.", "anim_why": "The ball is a flat target disc; blood in bars.", "fix": "Frame the face with the spikes; real spike wounds with exit meat; the cap off.", "scorer": "NEW-4", "sheet": "/Volumes/Workspace/Scratch/n4/sheets/sniper_audit/sniper.sling.jpg", "len": 7.65 }, { "id": "sniper.drain", "weapon": "sniper", "title": "DRAIN", "tier": "RARE", "kind": "film", "status": "built", "brut": 3, "cine": 4, "script": 5, "anim": 3, "brut_why": "XT is a purple body face down with the visor still on and one small eye hole: nothing extreme.", "cine_why": "Dark murky mids; the waterline drop doesn't read.", "script_why": "Water stops bullets so Faris drains his cover: a logic puzzle with little dread.", "anim_why": "Flat body, flat glass tube, flat water.", "fix": "Re-core: the tube's water as the clock of his death, the last round through glass, water and eye, a real face pressed to the glass.", "scorer": "NEW-4", "sheet": "/Volumes/Workspace/Scratch/n4/sheets/sniper_audit/sniper.drain.jpg", "len": 9.24 }, { "id": "sniper.rehearsal", "weapon": "sniper", "title": "REHEARSAL", "tier": "RARE", "kind": "film", "status": "built", "brut": 4, "cine": 5, "script": 5, "anim": 4, "brut_why": "One shoulder hole with a run; headphones on at XT; small.", "cine_why": "Static stage mediums and a scope.", "script_why": "He rehearses his gloat and Faris lets him finish: a gag core.", "anim_why": "Flat bodies, a plain stage.", "fix": "Re-core into horror; the bow's lengthwise wound shown open, headgear off, a real dead face.", "scorer": "NEW-4", "sheet": "/Volumes/Workspace/Scratch/n4/sheets/sniper_audit/sniper.rehearsal.jpg", "len": 8.96 }, { "id": "sniper.the-brass", "weapon": "sniper", "title": "THE BRASS", "tier": "RARE", "kind": "film", "status": "built", "brut": 3, "cine": 5, "script": 6, "anim": 3, "brut_why": "A face-down body with a small hole and the beanie on, the casing standing by his face.", "cine_why": "The casing's fall intercut with his dying is a nice structure; small frames.", "script_why": "His death lasts as long as the casing takes to fall: a good structural idea.", "anim_why": "Flat body; the casing is the only detail.", "fix": "Show the plunging wound (in over the collarbone, out of the belly), blood rising in his mouth, face up to the falling brass; headgear off.", "scorer": "NEW-4", "sheet": "/Volumes/Workspace/Scratch/n4/sheets/sniper_audit/sniper.the-brass.jpg", "len": 8.43 }, { "id": "sniper.echo-valley", "weapon": "sniper", "title": "ECHO VALLEY", "tier": "MYTHIC", "kind": "film", "status": "built", "brut": 3, "cine": 6, "script": 7, "anim": 4, "brut_why": "XT is a grey husk with one red crack line and a party hat on: not brutal.", "cine_why": "Jump-cuts deeper into the gorge and the mouths answering are atmospheric; the figure is small.", "script_why": "In the valley of echoes every answer takes something out of him: a strong realm.", "anim_why": "The gorge and its mouths are detailed; the husk is flat.", "fix": "Show the insides drawn out of the wound as a ribbon into the mouth, the husk split open to the cavity, the hat off, a stretched dead face.", "scorer": "NEW-4", "sheet": "/Volumes/Workspace/Scratch/n4/sheets/sniper_audit/sniper.echo-valley.jpg", "len": 13.93 }, { "id": "sniper.the-bag", "weapon": "sniper", "title": "THE BAG", "tier": "MYTHIC", "kind": "film", "status": "built", "brut": 4, "cine": 4, "script": 6, "anim": 5, "brut_why": "A frozen body with icicles, the beanie on and pink froth balls: pretty, not brutal.", "cine_why": "19.6 s, over the cap; dark wide forest shots with tiny figures; XT=VH=H=M finals.", "script_why": "A driven hunt by torchlight, laid out with the bag: grim and specific.", "anim_why": "Icicles, frost and the sprig; the body flat.", "fix": "Cut to 15 s; the boiler-room exit held open on the snow, froth frozen in it, the face frosted with open eyes; six different finals.", "scorer": "NEW-4", "sheet": "/Volumes/Workspace/Scratch/n4/sheets/sniper_audit/sniper.the-bag.jpg", "len": 19.59 }, { "id": "sniper.the-watched", "weapon": "sniper", "title": "THE WATCHED", "tier": "LEGENDARY", "kind": "film", "status": "built", "brut": 4, "cine": 5, "script": 6, "anim": 5, "brut_why": "Ruby crystals over the head with a socket ring: pretty, not gore; XT..L finals are the same picture.", "cine_why": "The red rash and the moor under the sky of scopes build dread; the final is a static portrait.", "script_why": "A sky where every star is a scope trained on him: a strong dread concept.", "anim_why": "Crystals are faceted and lit; the body under them is flat.", "fix": "The crystals split the skin open where they erupt (blood beading, flesh torn), the philtrum shot blowing the back of the skull over the stones; six different finals.", "scorer": "NEW-4", "sheet": "/Volumes/Workspace/Scratch/n4/sheets/sniper_audit/sniper.the-watched.jpg", "len": 13.33 } ]