# smg.tear-along-the-dotted-line → LONG TAKE · "THREE MAGS" · choreography doc v1 (N1, 27 Oct) · AWAITING COORDINATOR OK

> **COORDINATOR NOTES 27 Oct ~17:00 (to apply on resume; the doc body below is v1).** Audit approved; THREE MAGS is good.
> CUT CAST 2 (the gold step under the aerial): no springboard casts (CINE_ROLLOUT ANTI-TEMPLATE). She goes over the stream with her
> own aerial straight off the floor. That leaves two casts (N kukris, F gold magazine), which is within the 2-4 rule. Also re-check
> against the ANTI-TEMPLATE list and name in the summary the dismemberment (the shoulder taken on the barrel, a thigh), the opening
> (hip to collarbone, a diagonal) and the end pose (face up at his boots, reaching for his ankle), with why each fits the story.

Rebuilds the EPIC slot in place (same key and rarity); the scissors gag is retired. STYLE: **LONG TAKE**: one unbroken camera move
from the first frame to the XT. No cuts and no shot changes, only camera choreography: dolly, orbit, crane, push, rack, a whip pan, a
lens drift, and shake coupled to every hit and recoil. Slow-mo ramps are allowed inside the take; they bend time, not the camera.

**STORY.** Faris has three magazines: one in the gun, two on his belt, all of them readable in frame. Nitha, a knife fighter, knows it.
She fights the gun's rhythm: she makes him spend a magazine, then she lives inside every reload. She takes both his spares from him.
His answer is the one magazine she can't take: he casts it out of gold ink.

**Victim:** Nitha (bare hands, then gold kukris). **Needs:** `{ kinds: ['FLOOR'], space: { w: 240 } }`, room58 about [-110, 130];
everything is drawn or cast by the kill; it plays on all 18 arenas (The Deep skips: dry ground). **Length:** about 20 s from trigger to final, at real-time speed.
**SMG facts used:** 18-round magazines at 13 rounds a second (a full dump is 1.4 s); short controlled bursts; the empty-gun click; the mag drop.

## THE BEAT SHEET (scene seconds; F = Faris, N = Nitha; 1 FH ≈ 65 u)

| t | NITHA | FARIS | CAMERA (one move) / FX / SOUND |
|---|---|---|---|
| 0.0-1.6 | Low stance, three FH off, weight on the balls of her feet. **CAST 1** ('claw'): she rakes both hands and two curved gold kukris ink into her fists. | Seats mag 1 with a slap. Two spares on his belt. | The take opens at floor level on a rolling casing; it tilts up Faris's leg to the slap, then drifts round to her cast. |
| 1.6-2.6 | Sprints in on a zig-zag of real cuts (plant, push off the outside foot). | Two 6-round bursts lead her; the rounds chew the floor at her heels. | The camera dollies with her, low, Faris in the far frame. Pocks and chips (generic floor). |
| 2.6-3.1 | Reads the third burst. **CAST 2** ('slam', mid-stride): a knee-high gold step inks up in her path. She plants on it and goes OVER the stream in a no-hands aerial. | The last 6 rounds pass under her. | **SLOW-MO 1** (0.15x, ~0.35 s scene): inverted over the tracers, the kukris tucked, her hair hanging, brass hanging. |
| 3.1-3.4 | Lands inside his reach. | *Click.* Mag 1 empty. | Snap back; the camera has swung round to put F's shoulder in the foreground. |
| 3.4-5.6 | **RELOAD WINDOW 1.** The flurry: high slash (he leans away), low slash (he steps back), the thrust. | Catches the thrust on the SMG's frame (clang, sparks); the empty mag drops; a kukri opens a thin cut on his forearm (his blood). He stamps her lead foot and shoves with the gun, slapping mag 2 home as she skips back. | One continuous 270° waist-high orbit round the exchange; a flash frame on the clang only. |
| 5.6-7.0 | **MAG 2 · THE TRAP.** Straight back in: she clamps the barrel under her left arm against her ribs (smoke off her shirt) and cuts at his face with the right. | Fires anyway: the first rounds exit harmlessly behind her. | The camera pushes in to a tight two-shot. Sizzle. |
| 7.0-7.3 | — | Twists the muzzle across her body. | **EXPLODING LIMB 1:** the burst saws through the trapped arm at the shoulder. **SLOW-MO 2** (short): the arm stays clamped round the hot barrel for a beat, then slides off and drops. The torn shoulder (bone, muscle section, sinew; never a disc). |
| 7.3-8.4 | Staggers back screaming, then rage. | Mag 2 runs dry in the struggle, the last rounds into the floor. | The camera eases back to a mid. Spurts on the heartbeat. |
| 8.4-9.2 | Spins and kicks the reload out of his hand. | His last mag skitters away across the open floor. | The camera follows the mag for a beat and stops on it, then racks back to them. |
| 9.2-10.6 | Circles, the kukri up, bleeding. | Looks at his empty belt. Then at her. | A slow lateral drift; quiet; the low hum of the bed. |
| 10.6-12.4 | — | **CAST 3** ('fist'): he closes his free hand and a gold MAGAZINE inks into it, gold rounds glinting in its window. He seats it; a gold glint runs down the gun. | The camera creeps in over his shoulder; ink.cast.fist. |
| 12.4-14.0 | Throws her last kukri at his head, then charges one-armed, screaming. | Slips the throw by an inch. | The kukri spins past the lens and the camera lets it go. |
| 14.0-15.0 | — | **THE GOLD MAG:** one long burst. | **SLOW-MO 3** (0.1x, ~0.6 s scene). **EXPLODING LIMB 2:** the first gold round takes her lead leg off mid-thigh as she lunges. She pitches forward into the stream, and the gold tracers open her from the hip to the collarbone (**THE OPENING**: ribs split, the wall torn, gold sparks in the wound). Her momentum carries her to his feet. |
| 15.0-18.0 | Falls face up at his boots; her one hand reaches for his ankle and stops. | Ejects the gold mag; it un-draws in the air. | Snap back loud, then a slow crane up and over her: the floor stitched with holes, the two black mags and the kicked spare all in frame. |

**XT (final, the take's resting frame):**
- Face up at his boots, the dead face upright (half-lidded, blood at the mouth).
- The torso opened from the hip to the collarbone (ragged edges, broken ribs, uneven organs; no even patterns).
- The arm lying a stride away, still curled as it was round the barrel.
- The leg off mid-thigh, its femur end showing in a torn section.
- Faris's boots and the smoking muzzle at the frame edge.

**Casts:** N 'claw' kukris, N 'slam' step, F 'fist' gold magazine. All of them are fight moves; none copies any map's architecture. Everything un-draws at the exit.
**Uniqueness:** no kill on the page makes the reload the fight's clock, or casts the ammunition itself. The arm clamped on the barrel
and taken off by it, and a mid-thigh leg loss, are new (CLINCH takes the hand at the wrist and the leg at the knee; SUPPRESSION takes the elbow, both shins and the shoulder).
**Sound:** each mag's own rhythm and its empty click; the knife whistle; the clang; the gold mag has a brighter, ringing report.
**Ladder after the XT pass:**
- VH: the leg, then she bleeds out crawling.
- H: shot down mid-charge.
- M: dropped by the burst, X eyes.
- L: he clubs her with the gold-mag gun; out cold.
- VL: the gold mag jams with a puff of glitter, and she trips over the kicked spare and knocks herself out.

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## v2 · 27 Oct ~19:45 · MOVED TO THE `smg.the-autograph` SLOT (MYTHIC; the user's REPLACE). TEAR ALONG stays (user: OK BUT).
Key `smg.the-autograph` (rarity MYTHIC kept). The applied notes: no gold step (her aerial is off the floor: a running no-hands aerial),
plus LESSONS 4.
- **Casts (2):** Nitha's gold kukris ('claw') and Faris's GOLD MAGAZINE ('fist').
- **Dismemberment (why):** her left arm, the one clamped on the barrel, blown off at the shoulder: she traps the gun, and the gun takes what traps it. It is a plain stickman limb with a torn red end and blood; no bone or muscle anatomy.
- **The gold burst:** the first gold round blows her lead leg apart at the thigh in two simple pieces. The stream then bursts her belly: a short spill of gut loops falls out of the thin silhouette to the floor (moderate; the torso never bulges). This is the "last magazine" payoff: the first gold rounds end the charge.
- **End pose:** she falls forward FACE-DOWN at his boots, her one hand reaching for his ankle. The head is a plain stickman head: no eyes, no mouth after death.
- **Faces before death:** minimal (focus, then pain at the arm). None after.
- **XT, less zoomed:** a wide-ish mid with her whole body, Faris's legs and the smoking gun, the arm a stride off, the two black mags and the kicked spare.
- **Wounds:** HFX torn entry wounds (no rings or discs).
- **Switches:** face and gore drawing go through the shared switches (the gore-styles page picks).